Draft workshop: Summary and Analysis

Read through your partner’s Unit 3 draft once quickly. Then go back to the beginning, and for each sentence (or clause), change the color of the sentence to red if it is primarily descriptive (i.e. it contains information that one would have trouble disagreeing with) or blue if it is primarily interpretive (i.e. it makes a claim that one might reasonably disagree with).

Does one color dominate the other? Suggest strategies that the author might employ to strike a better balance of descriptive and interpretive content.

Model paragraph:

I still have not come up with the exact reason of why this painting captured my attention in the museum, but there are things in it that stick out in my mind. The contrast of colors and tones may have been what made me stop and look harder and longer at this picture than others, or maybe the dead animals that surround the tail of the princess and her colors. Most of the time people do not think of death with bright colors. The fetal pig that is in the wall the original painting in the Ackland museum is interesting to me also because I took special interest in the dissection of the pigs when I was in biology lab. The caption on the wall beside the picture from the author, said that the painting represented the destructiveness of the wealthy of the time. So I guess that is what all the dead animals represent in the picture. The wealthy is being represented by the princess, and the tail represents the beauty and power that people had at the time, but also destructiveness and greed of the wealthy at that time.